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This is how it would have gone if I had written it...

Posted on 16-Jan-06 at 11:39.
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A little ficlet for mmmchelle, who is stressed-out and working way too hard.






She had known John was coming. It had been foretold. She had seen him in her mind--a handsome man, with dark hair and eyes, body narrow and long like the grasses in the field. He would come, with his quiet, gentle ways, and he would save them from the beast. She had known this since childhood.

He would come to her, and together, they would achieve ascension.

What she hadn't foreseen was the other one. The loud one. The one who never stopped talking, never stopped questioning. The one who complained about the food they shared with him, the one who refused to meditate (I can already do amazing things with my mind, thank you very much), the one who made her little sister cry.

The one who was not ready for ascension. Who might not ever be.

Together, John and McKay constantly sought escape, not enlightenment. McKay would talk of power sources and field generators, hands waving wildly, and would John nod in agreement. They would disappear into the woods for hours, forsaking the safety of the cloister.

John did not realize he was on the wrong path. It was up to her to change that.

So one morning, as Teer made a simple breakfast, she looked to John's hut. The shutters were drawn, and she thought maybe John was still in bed. She decided she would bring him breakfast, so she could talk to him, alone, without the other one who would interrupt and argue, then ultimately dismiss her. She was the only one who could make John understand who he was and why he was here with them.

She used her mind to see past the walls of John's hut, checking to see if he had arisen.

John had not. He was still in bed, but he wasn't alone.

McKay was with him.

McKay with him, and they were naked, both of them. Naked and in a fierce embrace, legs entwined, John's narrow hips pressing against McKay's body. His hands cupped McKay's face and John was kissing him as if the path to enlightenment could somehow be found in his body.

Teer looked away, shocked. She dropped the breakfast tray and ran from her hut into the fields. She needed to meditate on this, she needed to understand why one had been foretold but the not the other. She needed to think deeply on it. Dropping to her knees, she closed her eyes, emptying her mind her mind and waiting for understanding.

Then she looked back. Just to make sure she had seen properly the first time.

They were still naked. Laying face to face, entirely wrapped up in each other--John's leg slung over McKay's hip, arms wrapped around McKay's shoulders, his head tucked against McKay's neck. McKay had one hand down between John's legs, stroking steadily, shoulder muscles flexing and John rocked his hips in time with McKay's strokes.

It was fascinating, and it was beautiful, two bodies fitting together so perfectly, one golden and lean, the other broad and pale. Teer kept watching as John closed his eyes and tightened his grip on McKay, hands curling into fists against the center of McKay's back. His body twisted and he pushed himself at McKay as if he wasn't yet close enough, straining and shoving with his hips while McKay held steady, immovable as always. Then John shuddered violently, open mouth pressed against McKay's skin to muffle his cries.

John relaxed at last, releasing his hold on McKay and rolling back against the pillows, eyes heavy-lidded and sleepy. McKay followed with gentle kisses, rubbing his nose into John's beard. John laughed, and McKay smiled at him with a sweetness Teer would not have thought him capable of.

And then she understood. Maybe. She couldn't be certain, though. Not yet, anyway. So, as she watched John lift his legs onto McKay's shoulders, sliding down on the pillows and tucking his backside into McKay's lap, she settled in and made herself comfortable for continued enlightenment.


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Moony McMoonsome
the_moonmoth at 2006-01-16 18:05 (UTC) (Link)
she settled in and made herself comfortable for continued enlightenment.

*giggles dirtily* Oh yeah.

Very nice, Grrl, thank you :)
thegrrrl
thegrrrl2002 at 2006-01-16 18:26 (UTC) (Link)
*g*

We all could use a little enlightenment, couldn't we?

It would be so pretty. ::sighs::
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thegrrrl
thegrrrl2002 at 2006-01-16 18:28 (UTC) (Link)
While there was a lot I liked about the ep, I just would have loved to have seen Rodney stuck in that cloister with John. It would have been quite entertaining.
The Porn Fairy
shetiger at 2006-01-16 18:18 (UTC) (Link)
*snickers*

Oh, yeah. That makes it all better.

*waits for continued enlightenment*
thegrrrl
thegrrrl2002 at 2006-01-16 18:28 (UTC) (Link)
Oh, if only! *g*
inthekeyofd
inthekeyofd at 2006-01-16 18:22 (UTC) (Link)
First, please please apply for a writing position on that show!!

Second, please tell me you wouldn't have used that line that she did on John..I would have in a heartbeat, that is after I recovered from seeing him naked when I changed him out of his Atlantis geer. Funny how she got to be the one to do that??*smile*

Third, screw ascension, I would have watched too. *smile*

And finally, "The other one" you didn't even have to write the name and I immediately knew who you meant, I can't even wrap my brain around Rodney meditating, I can just imagine (and you put it so well) just he would say to that..and lets face it, John was so either falling asleep, trying to get out of the place of boredom and loose fitting clothes, or thinking about what positions Rodney was going to have to get in as payback for leaving him there for so long. *smile*

I have to say, last week sucked, this weekend was *meh* (with the exception of Epiphany--I could watch John with that freakin' stalk of hay for hours..and from the amount of times I've seen it, I think it just may have) and today started off so badly I have a headache that could knock out a small city...so you know, I TOTALLY APPRECIATED THIS!!!
thegrrrl
thegrrrl2002 at 2006-01-16 18:31 (UTC) (Link)
Second, please tell me you wouldn't have used that line that she did on John

Which line? When she said she had been waiting all her life for him?

She was kinda creepy during that scene, I thought.

And if I was the one who had to change him out of his Atlantis clothes, I would have mysteriously run out of fresh clothes to give him. *g* And yeah, I hear you about the stalk of hay and the lips. It was very fun to watch.

Hope your head feels better soon, you poor thing!
drlense at 2006-01-16 18:27 (UTC) (Link)
Yay for fic! Fic I enjoyed! Epiphany fic!! Hurray...
thegrrrl
thegrrrl2002 at 2006-01-16 18:32 (UTC) (Link)
::giggles::

Glad you liked!
chelle
mmmchelle at 2006-01-16 18:32 (UTC) (Link)
Fic! You wrote me fic! /squeezes you really, really tight/

This makes me feel so much better, thank you.

I loved seeing how Rodney would look to Teer, insisting that he could already do amazing things with his mind. I know John was standing there nodding in agreement, thinking about all the amazing things Rodney thinks up for them to do to one another.

Rodney smiling sweetly at John and then Teer settling in to watch made me smile. I think you managed to write a version of Teer I actually like. Thank you!!
thegrrrl
thegrrrl2002 at 2006-01-16 19:06 (UTC) (Link)
::squeezes you back:: I'm glad you liked it! It was intended to be pornier, but I got to thinking about how Rodney react to being in that sanctuary...he'd definitely be a fish out of water. *g*

I know John was standing there nodding in agreement

With a big dorky grin on his face. Yup. And maybe a stalk of hay between his lips.

I think you managed to write a version of Teer I actually like.

LOL, she was irritating in the ep, wasn't she? She couldn't comprehend that John belonged elsewhere. I think Rodney definitely needed to be there to point that out to her. *g*
Anna S.
eliade at 2006-01-16 18:35 (UTC) (Link)
Guhhhhhhhh...*meep*. Yes. Yes. Yesyesyes. That is how it should have been.

Then John shuddered violently, open mouth pressed against McKay's skin to muffle his cries.

John relaxed at last, releasing his hold on McKay and rolling back against the pillows, eyes heavy-lidded and sleepy. McKay followed with gentle kisses, rubbing his nose into John's beard. John laughed, and McKay smiled at him with a sweetness Teer would not have thought him capable of.


So happy-making, I glow. *glow*

So, as she watched John lift his legs onto McKay's shoulders, sliding down on the pillows and tucking his backside into McKay's lap, she settled in and made herself comfortable for continued enlightenment.

I glow with *glee*. *g*
thegrrrl
thegrrrl2002 at 2006-01-16 19:11 (UTC) (Link)
::watches you glow::

Cool! You're just like a ZPM!

Makes me feel glowy inside. Thank you!



miera_c
miera_c at 2006-01-16 18:38 (UTC) (Link)
Teer still creeps me out, even here. *shudder*

Somehow I think John would've been so much happier being trapped for six months with Rodney. *g*
thegrrrl
thegrrrl2002 at 2006-01-16 19:12 (UTC) (Link)
Oh, absolutely. I wish Rodney had been there with him. Although watching him do the rescue thing was quite wonderful, too.

Teer was definitely creepy.
Bluster
bluster at 2006-01-16 18:40 (UTC) (Link)
(I can already do amazing things with my mind, thank you very much),

That is so very Rodney. I can just hear him say it with a sneer and a touch of condescension in his voice.

I definitely like your version of the episode better. Thank you for sharing!
thegrrrl
thegrrrl2002 at 2006-01-16 19:13 (UTC) (Link)
Oh, you're very welcome!

I'm thinking this whole ascension thing would not appeal to Rodney at all. *g*
Shonaille
kalikahuntress at 2006-01-16 18:41 (UTC) (Link)
Thx for the fic, this is a lovely and much needed distraction seeing as my stupid computer is messed up and won't let me finish my project. Im still creeped out by Teer but thinking about enlightment has certainly put a smile on my face:)
thegrrrl
thegrrrl2002 at 2006-01-16 22:47 (UTC) (Link)
I think we all need to be enlightened. Really.

And I'm sorry for your computer woes. Hope it get unmessed soon!
Robyn
magickaldreamer at 2006-01-16 18:51 (UTC) (Link)
I'm up for that kind of enlightenment!
thegrrrl
thegrrrl2002 at 2006-01-16 22:48 (UTC) (Link)
Hell yeah! *g*
Captain of the Innuendo Squad.
brandinsbabe at 2006-01-16 19:00 (UTC) (Link)
enlightenment hehe! i love it!
this is definitly how it should have been ;)
thegrrrl
thegrrrl2002 at 2006-01-16 22:48 (UTC) (Link)
I know, I can't believe the writers totally missed the boat on this one.

Silly men.
Saba
saba1789 at 2006-01-16 19:06 (UTC) (Link)
Hm, somehow I like your version better - don't know why. *g* Thanks for writing and sharing this :-) .
thegrrrl
thegrrrl2002 at 2006-01-17 16:16 (UTC) (Link)
You're very welcome! *g*
lamardeuse
lamardeuse at 2006-01-16 19:22 (UTC) (Link)
Yeah, definitely the way it should have gone. :D
thegrrrl
thegrrrl2002 at 2006-01-17 16:18 (UTC) (Link)
I don't know why they didn't film this version of it, really. It would have been much more entertaining. *g*
SPACE GANDALF
trinityofone at 2006-01-16 19:42 (UTC) (Link)
Murgh.

And with these new mind-altering drugs that I've just invented, I can erase the 'Epiphany' that aired from my brain and remember this instead!

*does*

Wow, SGA is a really good show!
thegrrrl
thegrrrl2002 at 2006-01-17 16:19 (UTC) (Link)
*g* That's the way to do it! Gimme some of those drugs, too!
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